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Watch the world walk past
from your window today and try not to fall.


I think I did that once.
And I did fall, a trip, a accidental stumble,
whatever you call it.
a shit─splat on the concrete pavement.

They just walked around me.
But I ended up someone else
hurrying down the street where I'd just died,
loosening my shirt collar and wondering what time I'd have to get home
before my wife would know I was cheating.

I don't think there was any door,
or white light, or judgement.
But maybe I got confused. Death does that to you.


But you're not like me, so you won't
-accidentallyonpurpose accidentallyaccidentally
tumble from the seventh floor. Honest, you won't, so try it.

When you do maybe gauge your reaction to the punks on the street,
hanging around and saying nothing to each other.
It'll tell you who you are.

But then you'd have to sort out
which thought was original
and which was what you think you should have thought -
─they're actually pretty cool─i hate them─they suck─they can be nice─they're interesting─
and then it all gets horribly complicated
and you end up not thinking because, hell, it's so much easier.

Should you?

I've got no advice on that.
Suicides-who-are-not don't usually give very good advice on life.
©2009 ~chew-on-that
:iconchew-on-that:

Author's Comments

mfft. i'm not sure what to say about this. and i've got too many ideas what this is about, so if anyone has any specific ideas, please tell me. :)

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:iconspioradsaor:
I like this, it's not something I see very often, it is an interesting creativity with words.

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The heart has reasons that reason does not understand.
:iconroom462:
"But you're not like me, so you won't
-accidentallyonpurpose accidentallyaccidentally
tumble from the seventh floor. Honest, you won't, so try it."

that paragraph is amazing
:iconchew-on-that:
thanks a ton for the comment and the fave :D and wow i'm really encouraged you thought it was creative...

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i knew you were dead when you opened your eyes.
:iconchew-on-that:
thank you loads (:

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i knew you were dead when you opened your eyes.
:iconinaccurately-named:
This whole thing blew me away. It's just stunning. In both the amazing way and the startling way.

"loosening my shirt collar and wondering what time I'd have to get home
before my wife would know I was cheating."

This line really caught me offguard. I actually cocked my head to the side when I read it. XD I like the specific context it gives the piece.

This definitely deserves a favourite. :D
:iconchew-on-that:
wow. i...have no idea what to say. i'm beyond delighted you liked it so much. XD thanks tons for the fave! :D

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i knew you were dead when you opened your eyes.
:iconavolatilecalm:
love the dark humour ^_^ this is wonderful.

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Positive Affirmation
(Keep Breathin)


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**Inanely Inspired Insanity ~3EyesClub**
:iconchew-on-that:
thanks so much! :) i'm glad you liked it, i love dark humour so i guess it comes across in my writing sometimes XD

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i knew you were dead when you opened your eyes.

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